I'm Sorry · 7:21pm Dec 20th, 2014
God I love using this gif
Anyway, I got some good news and I got some bad news. The good news is I got four new chapters ready to be edited and posted for your enjoyment, the bad news is well....the brand new chapters are *sigh* another revision.
*Crowd starts booing and throwing popcorn at author*
Now I know you're mad and---hey watch that popcorn!
"Well you shouldn't keep revising asshole!" Shouted a user from the background. The rest of his group cheered him on.
Let me explain why this time will be different.
"Again, you said that like the other times asshole!" Shouted the same user.
Alright. I know I said I wasn’t going to do this again, and actually this really isn’t a revision more of a right turn for the story.
The chapters with Fluttershy’s house was the problem that kept me back from writing. Why? Because why would Scootaloo go to her hosse to get patch up when she’s only a couple feet away from her house. Nothing was happening really, just laughing and fun, almost like an episode of Friends. I can imagine the intro.
“Nopony told Scootaloo she wasn’t going to be this waaaaaay!”
*Shivers* Anyway the scene in the beginning with Applejack was just making me eyes bleed and I’m sure it did yours. So I had to remove it. It was for the best.
Don’t believe me?
She breathed in the fresh smell of hay cakes cooking in the kitchen. Taking in all the scent of maple syrup and cake batter, Scootaloo said, “Applejack, I’m home!”
She heard hoofsteps as Applejack trotted into the living room. “Howdy, Scoot—” The bowl Applejack had held in her hooves smashed onto the floor as she stared at Scootaloo’s new purple webbed wings. “Scootaloo, what in tarnation happened to you?!”
“What do you mean?” Scootaloo asked, then turned her head to look at her wings tucked to her sides. A smirk appeared on her face as she turned back to Applejack. “Oh, you mean my wings?”
“What happened to ‘em?”
Scootaloo chuckled.“I grew these babies at the hospital when I woke up from my little nap. I’m going to take them out for a spin with Rainbow Dash.”
Applejack nodded. “Okay Ah get that, back to the wings. Are they permanent? Like, they won’t change back?”
Scootaloo paused for a second.“I don’t think they will change back.”
“Do they hurt?”
"No."
“Are ya sure?”
Scootaloo smiled. “Positive.”
“Be honest with me, Scootaloo. You can tell me if it’s hurting.”
“Would I ever lie to the Element of Honesty?” Scootaloo mockingly said with a smirk, but it faded as Applejack cast an angry glare. “No, it’s not hurting. Honest.”
“Oh thank goodness,” Applejack muttered, sighing in relief. “So how was the hospital?”
“Boring.” Scootaloo frowned. “Their food tasted like toothpaste. I mean, they’re supposed to make the ponies feel comfortable while staying there, not feel like it’s a prison!”
"It was that bad?” Applejack chuckled and shook her head. “Ah’m happy to have you back, sugarcube.” She trotted up to Scootaloo then hugged her. "We all missed ya.”
“I missed you too.” Scootaloo looked around the room before turning her attention back to Applejack. “Where’re the others? I imagined coming back to a welcome party.”
“Out in the field,” Applejack replied. “Which reminds me, you have to do some bucking tomorrow.”
Scootaloo’s smile fell. “Really? Can I rest after a long day at the hospital? You’re going to make your little sister work after she passed out on her birthday?” She said, giving Applejack the puppy eyes.
Applejack chuckled. "No, not really."
Scootaloo sighed in relief.
Applejack smiled. "Well, Ah better check on the food," she said with a tip of her hat then trotted back into the kitchen to finish cooking.
All Scootaloo could think of was flying with Rainbow Dash. “Listen, Applejack, you wouldn’t mind if I went somewhere, would you?”
“Leaving so soon?”
AJ: So you're bat pony.
SC: *Nods*
AJ: Do your kind suck blood?
SC: I don't know.
AJ:......Well if you happen to suck my blood can you let me know if it taste like applejuice?
SC:........
Now is the party still happening? No, maybe, not right now. It’s not going to be completely forgotten, but for right now it’s causing me headaches. I’m not asking for you all to jump on the never ending revisions train, but think about this. I was by myself writing those old chapters, now I have two honest pain in the asses who is the best at feedback and telling me where I could improve. Even they said they liked the direction and saw the hard work and effort I failed to put in the last ones.
I’m not saying the story would be so fucking good it’ll make you shat your pants. No, I am saying is it’ll actually have something to look forward to, to think “Oh my god Scootaloo’s not going to like that!” Discussing my ideas with the people helping me, they liked some the ideas which will be presented in future chapters.
Now I’m not saying the update will be fast like the Flash, but it’ll be faster than before because I have a clear mind of what I want to do. Yes I am a bastard for doing this again to you all, I feel bad for as it, but screaming and claiming the story’s dead isn’t making it better. It’s actually makes me think writing a new chapter isn’t worth it. So here with reviewers said about the revision.
Rolling stones calling the revision: Who brilliant mind written this?
New York times saying: I like the direction and pacing of the story.
So I’m posting hopefully Monday or Tuesday the four new chapters will be posted. I hope you enjoy and don’t hate me. To list the things I had changed, added and deleted:
Luna scenes (deleted. She was a big info dump to the transformation)
Scootaloo adoption (changed. Yes, Scootaloo has a mother that will have a role you will see. Yes, she still with the Apples which will be explained )
Scootaloo's age 16 (changed to 13 for canon reasons)
Rainbow Dash flying scene and being an idiot which gets Scootaloo nose broken. (deleted)
Scootaloo's passing out when scenes were activated. (changed. She doesn't pass out. Will save for another time)
Sweetie Belle not being around. (changed, she is around more.)
Scootaloo's transformation (not happened only the hearing, the later features will come slowly.)
Dinky will have a role in this story.
Scootaloo knowing she's a Thersal. (changed, does not currently know. She thinks the senses are result of can't tell
Hospital scene (Deleted cause Scootaloo does not pass out.)
Fluttershy and Dash scenes.(deleted, Friends material.)
Applejack and Scootaloo kitchen scene (deleted)
After Scootaloo experience her hearing for the first time, discuss how it came to be with Sweetie and Apple Bloom.
Heart beating sound. (changed into something more realistic.)
Scootaloo will first abuse her hearing sense with a prank, her first target: Diamond Tiara.
Spike makes an appearance.
So yeah. Prak and Dash The Stampede and a couple more others are the people are the cause of me fixing this story into a better shape. So if you wanna go downvote and yell "you suck!" then I would understand and commit suicide the Japanese or whatever way. :P
Edit: This time, I'm going to continue despite if this revision don't work either. So new readers can read the new material when incomplete and the old could wait or read along until it's complete.
What episode is that gif from?
2666516 It's from a tumbler blog. Ask Cutie Mark Crusaders.
Wish you luck and hope everything will be perfect
I'll be watching...
2666866 Lol I mean after u left me bby! :( hey I was wondering if you could check them out?
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Daaaamn, I was actually hoping you had forgotten me to be honest
Well no, I don't have as much time as I wish I had.
Feel free to PM me anyway, I'll check my mails every once in a while, and I'd love to give you an hour whenever I can
mfw I'm remembered
It's nice to see that you're trying to make "Higher Senses" the best it can be. However, I'd recommend maybe working on maybe one or two more new chapters before going back and revising the old ones as a compromise of sorts, but you're free to do what you think is the best option. Anyway, best of luck on "Higher Senses", whether it's a new chapter or a revision, and I hope you are doing well.
2667287 I think the only chapter that is not being revised is chapter five which be renamed to (deleted scenes) so people could read the old version and see where I went wrong.
One of these days I'll be able to read it. I'll assume that day is when its marked as complete.
2667296 Sounds reasonable to me.
My greatest wish is to someday have one of those gifs that says "When's "If You Give a Little Love" Going to Update"?
2667301 Reasonable.
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:D
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Seriously, though, I'm just jealous someone made one for you.
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Take your time about the chapters! It's like that Apple Cider Season episode! Take your time! Quality over quanity!
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